Comments for The Feather Quill http://dawnagan.wordpress.com My Story Store Wed, 30 Jul 2008 17:01:41 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on New Story. by Tegan http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2006/07/05/new-story-4/#comment-2003 Tegan Wed, 30 Jul 2008 17:01:41 +0000 https://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2006/07/05/new-story-4/#comment-2003 hey i just stumbled upon this article. i work at the quesnel museum. i hope they got back to you the stories really great, we're thinking of doing something similar to your intervention next year maybe. and ya it gave me chills. good job:) hope you liked seeing her hey i just stumbled upon this article. i work at the quesnel museum. i hope they got back to you the stories really great, we’re thinking of doing something similar to your intervention next year maybe. and ya it gave me chills. good job:) hope you liked seeing her

]]> Comment on New Story by ~willow~ http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/06/23/new-story-7/#comment-1621 ~willow~ Tue, 26 Jun 2007 13:50:52 +0000 http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/06/23/new-story-7/#comment-1621 hi! some reactions for ya: 1. At first I thought the grandchildren were around 10 years old: when we first "meet" them they are whispering to each other over their sleeping grandmother, it seemed like something young kids would do... then a bit later Ada mentions that they are both working and yet they call round every day so yikes they are adults already... what seemed like an inconsistency interrupted the narrative as I went back to solve the mystery :p 2. At first I assumed Jack was "grandpapa", and was surprised that in fact he was Ada's first [only? true?] love - nice twist. However, this twist leaves me *very* curious about who it was that Ada <i>did</i> get hitched to, in order to produce the daughter who turned alcoholic. Where is <i>he</i> in this story? <i>What</i> is their story? Perhaps a sentence or two to address that would help quell the questions. That Ada would reminisce about jack with her grandchildren, with no mention of the kids' grandfather, adds to this mystery, and indicates that things might have been rather dysfunctional in that family... 3. Related to #3: I know alcoholism arises due to a variety of factors, internal and external... but with no mention of what sort of family Ada had/produced, I'm left hanging in terms of understanding, or even relating to the daughter. How much did Ada herself contribute to her daughter's alcoholism? 4. Related to #4: The entire debate as to whether or not to inform the daughter that her mother is very ill / dying could have been made more meaningful if you explored why it was an issue in the first place: is it "just" the alcoholism, or something[s] specific she had done that was just unforgivable? Details, details, I wanted more details! :-) 5. The ending was superb. It gave me goosebumps! Okay so the smile turning into a mischievous grin seems rather far-fetched to me, but the whole sunbeam and reunited thing was very moving. You succeeded in showing just how much Ada had longed for Jack, so when they were able to reunite, I was very happy for her. In summary: I would love to see more details to fill in some gaps, but even without that, I liked the tale very much. Keep writing! " ~willow~ " hi! some reactions for ya:

1. At first I thought the grandchildren were around 10 years old: when we first “meet” them they are whispering to each other over their sleeping grandmother, it seemed like something young kids would do… then a bit later Ada mentions that they are both working and yet they call round every day so yikes they are adults already… what seemed like an inconsistency interrupted the narrative as I went back to solve the mystery :p

2. At first I assumed Jack was “grandpapa”, and was surprised that in fact he was Ada’s first [only? true?] love – nice twist. However, this twist leaves me *very* curious about who it was that Ada did get hitched to, in order to produce the daughter who turned alcoholic. Where is he in this story? What is their story? Perhaps a sentence or two to address that would help quell the questions. That Ada would reminisce about jack with her grandchildren, with no mention of the kids’ grandfather, adds to this mystery, and indicates that things might have been rather dysfunctional in that family…

3. Related to #3: I know alcoholism arises due to a variety of factors, internal and external… but with no mention of what sort of family Ada had/produced, I’m left hanging in terms of understanding, or even relating to the daughter. How much did Ada herself contribute to her daughter’s alcoholism?

4. Related to #4: The entire debate as to whether or not to inform the daughter that her mother is very ill / dying could have been made more meaningful if you explored why it was an issue in the first place: is it “just” the alcoholism, or something[s] specific she had done that was just unforgivable? Details, details, I wanted more details! :-)

5. The ending was superb. It gave me goosebumps! Okay so the smile turning into a mischievous grin seems rather far-fetched to me, but the whole sunbeam and reunited thing was very moving. You succeeded in showing just how much Ada had longed for Jack, so when they were able to reunite, I was very happy for her.

In summary: I would love to see more details to fill in some gaps, but even without that, I liked the tale very much.

Keep writing!
” ~willow~ “

]]> Comment on New Story by Amy http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/06/23/new-story-7/#comment-1614 Amy Sat, 23 Jun 2007 08:17:41 +0000 http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/06/23/new-story-7/#comment-1614 oh mi gah!!! seriously i love it hun =]]. true love finds it way back together after death awwwwwwwsies! -wipes at her eyes- oh mi gah!!! seriously i love it hun =]]. true love finds it way back together after death awwwwwwwsies! -wipes at her eyes-

]]> Comment on New Story by The Promised Story. « Retarded Rugrat http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/06/23/new-story-7/#comment-1613 The Promised Story. « Retarded Rugrat Sat, 23 Jun 2007 08:04:13 +0000 http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/06/23/new-story-7/#comment-1613 [...] started this story this afternoon, and finally got it finished tonight. I’m pretty proud of the final effort. [...] [...] started this story this afternoon, and finally got it finished tonight. I’m pretty proud of the final effort. [...]

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]]> Comment on New story! by Kristyn http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/01/22/new-story-6/#comment-855 Kristyn Wed, 24 Jan 2007 14:59:13 +0000 http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/01/22/new-story-6/#comment-855 I definetly didn't see the Brother/Sister twist at the end. I thought they were a couple! I agree, great delivery. :) I definetly didn’t see the Brother/Sister twist at the end. I thought they were a couple! I agree, great delivery. :)

]]> Comment on New story! by retardedrugrat http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/01/22/new-story-6/#comment-842 retardedrugrat Tue, 23 Jan 2007 20:05:45 +0000 http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/01/22/new-story-6/#comment-842 I'm sorry to hear about you going through a little heartbreak Sandy. That always sucks. But I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :) I promise I'm going to try harder to get more written. I’m sorry to hear about you going through a little heartbreak Sandy. That always sucks. But I’m glad you enjoyed the story. :)

I promise I’m going to try harder to get more written.

]]> Comment on New story! by Sandy http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/01/22/new-story-6/#comment-836 Sandy Tue, 23 Jan 2007 16:12:59 +0000 http://dawnagan.wordpress.com/2007/01/22/new-story-6/#comment-836 Glad to be reading a new short story - going through a little heartbreak so it brought on some memories I really don't want to think about but as always - well written and a nice twist at the end. Glad to be reading a new short story – going through a little heartbreak so it brought on some memories I really don’t want to think about but as always – well written and a nice twist at the end.

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